Very interesting story, similar to mine.
Although C flat and F flat? Why not just say B and E? haha
The voice that says "Bring the bass" should totally be an octave lower. I think it would 1) be appropriate with the lyrics 2) fill out the song.
Keep it up.
thank you for being blunt. its hard to find someone that will actually be a critic. most are too nice. they just say good job without stating their true opinion. thank you for that. if i make more songs ill defiently run them by you. ill stay in touch.
I agree with Cyrberdevil about the theme. You need to throw some more kicks and crashes in there to give it the boss fight atmosphere. This feels more like a space voyage through an asteroid belt - a frozen asteroid belt.
The synth arpeggios got a little repetitive, but an overall solid tune.
Thanks, I'll keep that in mind in the future. And yea, I tried to change things up a bit in the song a few times, but a lot of the things I was adding was either clashing or got annoying the more I listened to the song.
This is badass. I really love the way the strings, hits, and guitar work together. It's a good mix and a nice melody/theme for said anime opening.
One of the hi hats (around 30 sec mark) sounds a bit off when it's played too quickly, but everything else is pretty spot on.
You wrote all this?
Thanks for comment.
Yeah, I've wrote all this.
>hi hats (around 30 sec mark)
And I'm planning to fix it in future version.
I don't know what it means to "beta test" audio, but here it goes...
It's a nice intro. I liked the auxiliary percussion elements, they had some great timing. Some more reverb would help fill them out more.
The silence at 50 seconds is a bit abrupt, maybe hold that single string note out during that point. I liked the chords that come in around the 1:15 mark. This is a nice theme to build off od. There are some good drum fills during that section as well. I can't help but feel like the chords need to resolve to something lower on the up beat. If I tinkered with this on the piano I could probably find it...
It starts to get a little bit repetitive around the 3 minute mark. The next section that comes in around 3:30 should probably pop up a bit sooner. This song is like some dark kind of regal. Almost as if you're at the Olympics going for gold, but coming up short.
Overall, I think it is a little too long for the amount of variation, but it definitely has some potential.
Thanks a lot :) I thought that is too long and i need there VOCALS! Nothing else needed ;) and it will be great harmony with it :)
Sometimes less is more. A little bit of washed out reverb on a guitar is all you need to capture the sheer epic-ness on this track.
Is that you playing, by chance? I like this more than the version I just put out :)
Sure is! I did this recording YEARS ago. I can't believe people still even see this!
Definitely got a good groove going here. My feet are tapping :) You did a nice job of keeping a main theme and building off of it. It's amazing how far a little subtlety goes in a song. For instance, one of the loudest sounds you can use is actually silence...
I felt like the high synths could have faded out a little longer around the 45 sec mark. The lead that comes in at 1:15 is a little too strong to be by itself. Might be a resonance thing, not sure...
That's some pretty sweet bass fillers you're working with. Nice job of bringing it all back around. I'd probably resubmit this one as a loop.
I'm dropping your score slightly, just because I'm not a big fan of samples. Keep at it!
I'm glad you like it! That thing you just said about silence just gave me an idea for a song, unexpected but I dig it lol. I see what you mean with those synths and the lead, I think that whole transition in between could've used a little more smoothing out too. Smoother high end transitions are definitely another thing I'll remember when making new stuff.
I really appreciate the advise, and the low score is expected with samples, not really my song per say I just helped piece it together
I remember a time when these were the only kind of comments that were given on newgrounds even if someone didn't like something 100%, they gave ideas on how it could be better. Very helpful stuff as usual man, thanks again
I think the tutorials are showing. This song is ripe with experimentation, but it's almost to a fault. Don't get me wrong, all of the fills, filters, and gates sound really cool...I just think they might be a bit overused and take something away from the track as a whole...
Where is the kick drum? I suppose it's ambient, but I still wanted more of a beat. The synth is bassy enough to call for one. I'm a sucker for beats, call it a bias.
The vibe on this is great though. I get that "You should feel nice and happy but you don't because something is just... off" from this. The piano and lead synth create an interesting contrast, whereby both want to be uplifting but the other counteracts it and brings it down. It's some combination of the melody and tone that does this. This is mastered very well, I might add.
Keep it up!
Thank you for the feedback! It's funny because I specifically went into this song thinking "Ok... I'm NOT gonna use a kick", haha. I just wanted to try something new and perhaps a bit more ambient than the stuff I've attempted previously! I definitely see what you mean about the experimentation. I tried to use it sparingly enough to not ruin the song but enough to give if that "off" vibe, but one pair of ears is never the best judge! Thank you again for the feedback! I really appreciate it! =)
Is anything ever finished? Eventually, you just let go...
Really cool intro. Somewhat dubby (like the reggae music)
Oh, man, that bass is nasty (in a good way). Some of the fills seemed a bit excessive though, like around the 50 sec mark. I really liked how you used the silent breaks in between different parts.
The vocals and drums worked very well together. I can imagine a mixing session went on for just the hi-hats and vocal samples combined ;). The spread on the vocals was awesome.
The part at two minutes was pretty slick, in that all of the instruments sounded like they were soaked in water. Good use of detune on the leads.
There's definitely a lot going on in this song. Good stuff
thanks kind sir. i guess the fills were a bit much, but I wanted to keep things interesting in this one
Why is it that songs in 3/4 always sound like some kind of waltz or march? I'll take your dream-vision further...
This melody is playing while the king is arriving to his castle, being paraded through the town streets by his knights while the village chants along. The somber feel means the king probably has some bad news for his townfolk. The wait with baited breath to hear what it might be...
The structure of this loop is pretty much perfect, I could definitely see this being used in a flash game in the near future :)
I wasn't very fond of the choir sound. I like the thought of having a choir in this piece, but it lacked the strength and clarity of the other instruments.
It may be that nearly every 3/4 song *is* a waltz, and it's by far the only kind of music I know that makes use of a 3/4 measurement instead of 4/4.
I could also imagine to see this in a flash game some day. I have also been contacted by some people on newgrounds here, who wanted to use some of my music in their flash games, but so far only two of them replied yet to show me how they used it :( . Anyway, I'd appreciate any further use of my music. That's also what the CC License is for, which is used here on newgrounds. The choir may be a little bit too much in the background, because I didn't do any mastering things to that piece of music (except adjusting the volume to avoid clipping), as I didn't do that to any of my musics yet.
Sorta throw back with some of those synths, I'm getting a game boy vibe.
I like how much you're mixing it up, but it feels almost a bit too experimental. Not to say that none of it works, all of it does...but there's a little too much variation to get a good groove going. You have about five minutes of breaks and fills in a two minute song, haha.
It was a very neat listen though.
Yeah what I was thinking is it sounds something like that old batman game for game boy or another 8bit game song, that wasn't really how I was hoping it'd sound but it works for the song i guess.
I definitely see what you mean about all the breaks, just seemed a bit boring to me without switching it up every two seconds. I always forget that I'm hearing it hundreds of times while making it, so what's boring to me might not be so bad to someone who's never heard it. I'll work on making the next one a bit more consistent lol
Thanks for the feedback!
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